What do you think of the first chapter of my story?

great idea! interesting beginning and good job alluding to previous events important to your narrator. I think you need to work on grammar and make sure to edit this draft. There are ways of writing to show emotion without using non-sentences like "damn." or "screw them." Look at some of your favorite books and try to emulate their style of writing. Published authors use tools to convey the messages and emotions of their characters without saying outright how they feel. In other words showing instead of telling.

Can Some Body Give Me Some Suggestion On My New Blackwing Deck?

its a really good deck all that missing is one elphin the raven and a black winged dragon and dark hole is legal now so take out onenof the mystical space typhoon and add in a dark hole and a rainbow dark dragon might be good in it..but i suggest to take out the dark armed dragon cause it is allitle to hard to get out and if you have more then 3 dark types then it is useless.

Girls and ladies, some help please?

sorry this is so random. i'm 13 and my 14 y.o. brother punched me HARD in the boob today. it's not the first time he's done it, and in the past my mom's grounded him and stuff like that. this time, though, she said she would take away his iPod for one day OR i could hit him in the balls. it's my choice. my sister said i should go for the balls, but i don't know (1) what shoes to wear, or (2) how to position him (it won't be a sneak attack, he's gotta just take it - standing up, kneeling, etc.). lol. help me out, girls!!!

My ex is confusing me, what to do?

I broke up with my ex about a week ago. She hasn't contacted me since. But she added me as a friend on facebook, and now she takes the time to email me to say that my email account got hacked (You know, those ones where it sends out spam from your email address) I think I got it sorted, as I changed my password. But anyway, she doesn't contact me for all this time, then she says this. She told my best mate that she cheated on me, and then when I confronted her, she denied it altogether. I loved this girl so damn much. I tried everything to make it work. She was my world, and I had it threw back into my face. We were best friends for about five years in high school, and she liked me for about a year beforehand. She wants it back to the friendship stage, where we could be like we were then. It seems like a good idea from the start, but I don't see it working as she hurt me. What does anyone make of this? What is she trying to do? She told me herself that she wasn't ready for a commitment. Yet, she could have told me that before.

Should i be worried? is it something serious?

I think peptic ulcer or duodenal ulcer, thanks to your quite detail information. For now, I recommend to avoid spicy foods, caffeine, smoking, soda, and also stress.

I slipped and fell at walmart?

I slipped and fell in the produce department of wal-mart. I strained to try to keep from falling and came down in a kneeling position on my right knee. When I got up I walked with a limp and I reported it to wal-mart. The first employee who responded noticed the produce sprayer that sprayed water on the veggies was facing out in the walkway. I also noticed the floor was wet and there were rugs in front of the produce that were wet and no wet floor signs were in place. They took pics of where I fell there was a mark about a foot and half long on the floor where I slid and fell. They also said they took pics of the sprayer. I had a dirt mark mud type substance on my knee but they said they were not allowed to take pics of my knee. I filled out an incident report and went to ER a few hours later. Nothing broke put me off work 2 days, told me to follow up with my Dr, and offered pain meds which I told them I didn't want because I don't tolerate them well. Did not offer anything else for pain I called back next day to ask for something for pain said to take Motrin OTC four tabs 800mg. I followed up with my ortho dr on the second day I seen the PA in the walk in clinic best they could do. He viewed x-rays from ER said looked ok diagnosis right knee contusion and strain. Said to wear brace from 3-6 weeks till healed and if gets worse or starts to swell alot to come back. I am concerned because I have had problems with this knee in the past osteoarthritis, but have not been to Dr. in over 2 years. I am not sure if more problems will arise from this I still walk with limp and its sore and painful but only 2 days out from accident so who know what will come. Do I have a case and what am I entitled to? I read Wal-Mart cases are tough but I am sure they were negligent because sprayer was facing walk way and no wet floor signs were posted and I am sure rugs were in place because of the potential of water getting in the floor from the sprayers.

Girls, looking for your help on this?

sorry this is so random. i'm 13 and my 14 y.o. brother punched me HARD in the boob today. it's not the first time he's done it, and in the past my mom's grounded him and stuff like that. this time, though, she said she would take away his iPod for one day OR i could hit him in the balls. it's my choice. my sister said i should go for the balls, but i don't know what shoes to wear or how to position him for it (i don't have to do a sneak attack, he's gotta just take it - standing up, kneeling, etc.). so what are ur ideas? help me out, girls!!!